The Prophecy of The Brown Dwarf - ch 1 - part 4
Thankyou mucho-mucho again. Helen, your comment about Morgan being young made me excited, because that means I do portray him right. I'm having a bit of trouble with nick-naming Morgan. I started with...
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Is the stranger Morgan has found the man whose thoughts we were reading at the start of the story? That's my guess anyway. Enjoyed this chapter, although I would like a bit more background information...
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Thanks, Helen! Toff is a great word, but I think it might not be understood by a general public. Maybe I'll stick it here and there, hmm... Need to think about it. While "Your/His Lordship" feels like...
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I think you should drop the word "kids" at the beginning. It's an anachronism that doesn't quite fit. Also believe it's fine to fill in more information about each character's background as you go...
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